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What my paper needs

·         My conclusion needs to be set up completely different in order to gain ethos and grab the attention of my audience

·         I need to give better details instead of just summarizing events

·         I need to further demonstrate how the scenes I use connect to my purpose

·         Instead of reflecting on all of the scenes I have to explain why they are significant

·         The many vague statements don’t do anything for the paper except bluff it up and I need to use those points what I made and connect them so my purpose is strong and easy to see.

Mistaken Procrastinator

·         The use of very vivid details, for example the way they described their mom, made us feel like we were there.  These details keeps the audiences attention

·         How they mentioned “The Dead Poets Society” to connect to the point of the paper was good because they made their connection through telling a story which is hard to do

Don’t Take it for Granted

·         The way they started right off with dialogue automatically grabs the audience’s attention which is a good way to start off a narrative

·         The way the make the connection makes the pathos strong.  The connect to the audiences emotions to connect their story and there point

A Dreamers Reflections on the Waking World

·         The way the introducing starts off with all of those details that we have no idea what they are describing gets the audience’s attention.  We don’t find out until the next paragraph what was being described which builds up anticipation early on

·         Talking about the lucid dreams to make the connection is interesting but its works because it’s a different subject and the audience has to know what they ar4e referring too.

·         The connection that was made which was restated as the conclusion was very strong.  They build it up throughout the story which was a dream and the made it clear in the conclusion worked well.

Critical Cultural Evaluation

I will be evaluating Family Guy as a good source of entertainment which gives us subliminal messages.

·         It uses current events as a base for its show

·         It humorous so it keeps the audience’s attention

·         It gives messages through different characters

"Hidden Message of Distruction in Family Guy?, Page 1." AboveTopSecret.com - Conspiracy Theories, UFOs, Paranormal, Political Madness, and Other "Alternative Topics" Web. 02 Aug. 2011. <http://www.abovetopsecret.com/forum/thread675737/pg1>.

This source will give examples of different messages brought to the audience.  It shows how each character can contribute a different meaning.

Family Guy - Television Review." Reviews and Ratings for Family Movies, TV Shows, Websites, Video Games, Books and Music. Web. 02 Aug. 2011. <http://www.commonsensemedia.org/tv-reviews/family-guy>.

                This source gives different perspectives of parents and what they think on the show. It reviews all the characters and what they offer to the show.  It gives a brief analysis of the characters

“Audience Evaluation Reports « General Sentiment Blog." General Sentiment | Home. Web. 02 Aug. 2011. <http://www.generalsentiment.com/blog/tag/audience-evaluation-reports>.

                This source contains different audience reviews.  This is important because they are the people who keep the show running.  They have different opinions and that is important because they are the viewers.

Lady Gaga

I decided that I would watch the video that the blog is about before I read it, I was disturbed.  How could a person develop an interest of making videos like that?  I read the blog and learned a lot more than I ever expected knowing about Lady Gaga.  The people who post in the blog know a lot about Lady Gaga and all of the points they made describing the video and everything else she has done.  The mention how her homosexuality is the reason why her video was the way it is.  All of the little messages and explanations make sense.  The writers link what they say with emotions of the reader in order to keep their attention.  Although I have absolutely no interest in Lady Gaga’s life all of the points they bring up seem apparent through her music.  She is who she is and that’s why she does the ridiculous stuff she does.  The authors do research and about what she does and they show how it comes from books and has a more serious message. 

Cultural Objects of Interest

There are hundreds of cultural objects of interest that have affected millions of people.  With the development of the internet websites like Facebook, eBay, amazon, Google, and YouTube have become extremely popular.  As a college student almost everyone from home and every new person I meet has a Facebook.  A Facebook allows you to stay connected with a person easily over the internet. It’s an easy as logging on to your profile and clicking on someone’s picture in order to get in contact with them.  On YouTube you can search one thing and 4 videos later be enjoying something completely different.  It’s a good way to pass time.  If your video becomes popular enough you can eventually receive payments.   I think all of these things offered on the internet are good things.  Because of the technical advancements it makes life a lot easier.  Our generation has received the biggest impact because of the technology.  This is because we were the ones that have watch it revolutionized.  Music has had a huge impact on almost everyone in the world.  It doesn’t matter what type of music you listen to, most of it has little subliminal messages hidden in them.  Music catches my attention because it is relaxing and pleasing to listen to.  There are so many different types so there is something that catches everyone’s interest.  Music has made impacts all over the world.  Huge concerts such as live aid and live 8 raise millions of dollars for aids research in countries in Africa.  Music artists become famous and are able to raise money and advertise awareness for certain causes.  Somme people get crazy over music and follow bands across the country.  There’s no harm in this love because that band is probably advertising a cause the follower agrees with.  Video games are also among one the most popular cultural objects of interest.  I myself am not much of a gamer but almost all of my friends are obsessed with at least one game.  Games are a way to learn obstacles and problem solving skills.  In a lot of games it takes working in a group in order to succeed and that can be beneficial.  There are pros and cons to all cultural objects of interest.  Video games for instance have caused some people to lock themselves in there house because of the addiction the have adapted from them.  On the other hand there or video game competitions that people compete for with sufficient cash pays outs.

Peer Review Reflection

After the peer review we did I got a lot of good feedback that made my paper a lot better.  Rafy helped my style a lot and told me where to rephrase.  He pointed out that there were a lot of spots where my word choice, and order, didn't fit in.  He sugested different words and that made my paper flow a lot better.  He told me that in certain spots I did no give enough detail.  I had to explain more to keep my readers attention.  When I brought up people or stories I didn't didn't go into enough detail with them.  He spent a lot of time on my paper which made him find so much room for improvement.

Narrative

I am going to do number 2 which you have suggested.

2)Pick a friend or a group of friends that were important to you. Describe some of your favorite moments with them in order to demonstrate, in a rhetorical savvy way, the value, difficulties, or nuances of friendship.

I will also link to that how leaving for college lead to me realzing what they mean to me etc.

Dinner Description

I remember exactly it was 4:21 and i texted my 2 friends to meet me in front of redifer.  The buffet opens at 4:30 and i hadn’t eaten anything all day.  John and Alex met me there and we walked the dining hall.  The air conditioning slapped us in the face and as we walked down the stairs we tried to predict what was going to be served.  All I could smell was the cleaner used on the floors which were freshly cleaned and still slippery.  We got up to the cash register and the buffet wasn’t busy at all due to the fact we were so early.  I made my round about that buffet starting with the salad.  I grabbed a big scoop off lettuce hearing the leaves crunch as i used the tongs, next tomatoes that leaked red juice onto my lettuce.  I added some chick peas and olives and coated it in a thick ranch dressing that leaked throughout the salad.  I kept going around the buffet and filled up my tray.  I put my tray on the table and went to get a drink.  I watched 2 glasses fill up of the sweetest best juice I have ever tasted, kiwi strawberry cocktail.  I brought them back to the table.  I started off with a nice piece and steak.  I cut right through it and the saltiness was the first thing I tasted.  It was cooked perfectly and got stuck in my teeth.  The aroma from the baked beans was calling my name next.  I picked them up as the slime ran through the forked. I through what i could in my mouth and felt the beans mush into my teeth.  I also had a few ribs.  The portions they give you are never big but there were about 3 on the small piece of the rack I got.  The meat practically fell off of the bone and they weren’t sweet bbq it had a kick to it.  The spice burnt my nose a little bit but I loved it.  The meat got stuck in my teeth and i had to suck it out with my tongue.  The last thing i got to dig into was my salad.  As I dove my fork into the bowl I heard all of the different vegetable crunch and stick to the fork.  Covered in the ranch dressing i grabbed one bite of it and realized it was full.  It was a good dinner though.